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    Considering your recent behavior, I can’t say I would blame George for killing you, Andrew.

    A loud banging noise woke Andrew as his cell door flung open. He lazily turned his body toward it to see a blurry, red figure approaching. The prison sounds he had grown accustomed to traveled throughout the cell but did little wake him, having become numb to them some hours ago.

    As the prisoner rubbed his eyes, a loud voice boomed within the cell.

    “Rise and shine Marshtomp!”

    Without warning, sharp claws painfully scratched his soft skin. Despite now being wide awake, he still found it nearly impossible to move. The familiar sensation of his heart beating rapidly against his chest returned, as confused and panicked thoughts filled his mind. 

    What’s happening? Am I still alive? That wasn’t a dream? I’m a Pokemon? Is the Pokemon Earth flat? Am I being kidnapped again? 

    Andrew tried to yell, but a furry red hand clasped around his mouth before any sound could exit. He felt the claws further dig into his skin as the creature hoisted him off the cold stone floor.

    “I’ll admit you’re tougher than ya look, kid!” said his newest captor, hoisting Andrew over his back as if he were nothing more than a toy.

    The Pokemon’s fur was surprisingly warm and soft, a pleasant sensation sweeping over Andrew’s torso as his skin absorbed the strange heat. He shuddered slightly at the warmth, despite the unexpected gratification, the panic rising within him only grew. Thin orange eyes darted from side to side as he was carried out of the cell.

    Relief washed over him as they exited the confining room. His overactive heart began to slow and his limited breathing began to stabilize. Being given a new perspective via the Incineroar’s back, he carefully watched the various Pokemon squabble below him. 

    They passed one door with a violent thrashing coming from it, each motion pushing it further and further off its hinges as it seemed barely able to hold on. A group of Pokemon began rushing to it, getting into what looked like fighting positions in preparation for whatever was about to emerge.

    But as Andrew and the Incineroar lumbered away from the cacophony, the jail seemed to return to its normal state of chaos. Andrew began growing bored from the long, slow walk. His eyes began to droop shut as his lack of sleep began to catch up with him. But before he could fully lose consciousness, the Incineroar’s voice broke its silence.

    “Ya know kid, doctor chewed me out for not feeding ya,” he said, tightening his grip.

    Andrew’s eyes shot back open. Does this Incineroar want revenge? Did he bring me here to kill me? 

    He panned his head around, only to find himself back in the empty, dark hallway from the previous day. Not a single other Pokemon was in sight.

    The perfect place to kill me! 

    He was panicking. Every alarm bell and warning system that existed within Andrew’s mind begged him to do something— anything to escape the Incineroar! He began to raise Andrew off his back. Using only one hand, he carefully placed him on the ground before speaking.

    “Sorry about that whole mess last night. But don’t go pulling this guy’s tails!” The Incinorear said lightheartedly as he opened a door next to Andrew.

    He tilted his head, why is this guy suddenly being nice? A suspiciously large grin spread across the Incineroar’s face as he continued to hold the door open. Andrew watched the Pokemon’s eyes narrow as he entered the room. After feeling the door shut behind him, he heard a soft click. A reminder that he was yet to earn back his freedom. 

    Squinting his eyes and scanning the room, Andrew quickly realized it appeared identical to the one from the previous day. It had identical furnishings and paint, as well as the same wall-length mirror. Unlike the last time he was in an interrogation room, however, somebody was waiting for him… and they were standing on top of the table.

    Looking down, the Pokemon yelled, “Hey kid! Andrew isn’t it?” His yellow eyes pierced Andrew’s own.

    Without thinking, Andrew blurted out. “Oh, and are you also here to interrogate me?”

    The Pokemon’s eyes narrowed and his expression fell into a bitter scowl. He spoke in a quieter, more dramatic voice, “That’s a bold accusation, Mister Marshtomp.”

    Andrew’s eyes widened as the Pokemon he registered as a Grovyle jumped down from the table. His scowl transitioned into a sharp grin as he bore his claws and approached. Andrew’s mouth fell slightly agape and his flippers rose to shield his face from the attack which was surely about to hit him. Now only inches away, the Grovyle spoke,

    “I like you, Mister Marshtomp,” before bursting out laughing.

    Embarrassed, Andrew dropped his flippers and turned his head to the floor. He felt the Grovyle playfully slap him against the back. It’s not like we’ve known each other for only two minutes, he thought. sarcastically. To his surprise, however, the Grovyle attempted to console him.

    “Um, sorry if I upset you, Mister Marshtomp.” He said softly as he placed a claw on Andrew’s back. “The name’s George.” 

    The additional change in mood only added to Andrew’s confusion. Turning his head back up from the ground, he studied George with a blank expression. George’s face curled into a weary smile as he motioned toward the table.

    “Please Mister Marshtomp, have a seat.”

    Mister Marshtomp? Since when is that my name? Andrew thought. Despite his surprise by George’s sudden display of formality, he reluctantly obliged the request. With a slight scowl, he made his way to a bench. George sat down on one bench across from him and cleared his throat.

    “Now Mister Marshtomp, do you know who I am?”

    “My name is Andrew, not Mister Marshtomp,” he sneered.

    Shaking his head and sighing, George asked again, “Andrew, do you know why you are here?”

    “Because I robbed a store?” Andrew tilted his head slightly.

    Smiling, George said, “You aren’t supposed to admit that to me.”

    Andrew straightened his body and began tapping the table with his stubby fingers. “I have no idea what you’re talking about. I did not rob that store.”

    “That’s the right attitude kid! The judge might even believe that, with some practice of course.” George winked at him.

    Judge? Andrew thought. Like in a trial? Is this guy my lawyer, or something? Do I even get a trial? Are they going to put me in a Pokemon prison? Andrew’s eyes shifted up towards the ceiling as the thoughts swirled in his head. He grabbed the table and dug his fingers into the wood, envisioning an even bigger and noisy prison. Raising a claw and clearing his throat again, George brought Andrew back to reality.

    Though caught off guard, Andrew quickly refocused and barraged the lawyer with questions. “Is the judge a nice person? How many judges are there? I’m going to a court trial, right? How long will they sentence me? Are they going to sentence me? Are they going to kill me? Am I going to die? Are you going to kill me?”

    “Woah, slow down Andrew,” said George as he raised his sharp claws. “I’ll answer all your questions. But right now, I think you need some water. We wouldn’t want a repeat of yesterday, would we?”

    “No?” Andrew asked as he leaned back slightly.

    George hopped off his bench and made his way toward the door. He pulled out a key seemingly from thin air before speaking again.

    “I certainly agree! Be on your best behavior while I make a trip to the kitchen. Don’t go pulling anybody’s tails~” 

    A scowl overtook Andrew’s face as George laughed carelessly. The Grovyle twisted the key in the doorknob until a satisfying click sounded from it. He promptly opened the door and stepped out of the room. Taking one last glance at Andrew, he smiled and shut the room’s only exit.

    Still tired and without much else to do, Andrew climbed onto the table and lay down. His tail fins fell flat beneath his weight. 

    The room was in absolute silence. 

    His eyelids began to feel heavy as they stared at the old, peeling, dilapidated, paint on the ceiling. Perfectly relaxed, he allowed his eyes to fall shut as a faint smile crept onto his face.

    He waited to fall asleep.

    And waited.

    And waited.

    But his wakefulness did not subside. Andrew pushed himself and opened his eyes. Something about his body felt… wrong. Well, something about his body always felt a bit wrong since he had become a Pokemon, but it felt more off than usual.

    Andrew scratched the back of his head fin and grunted with annoyance. Why is there always something wrong with me? 

    Bringing his flipper up to his eyes, he noticed something peculiar. There was no sheen of liquid covering it. His flipper was entirely dry. Oh, he thought as his eyes widened. Y’know, maybe I could use some water. He shuddered as he came upon the realization that non-moist skin was now fiercely unnatural to him.

    Without a medium to entertain himself, Andrew murmured under his breath and hopped off the table to pace around. The room wasn’t any fun to look at, with walls dulled with age and dirtied where they met the floor and ceiling, and tables with benches with no decoration or flair to them. 

    A damp wood smell lingered in the air. The overpowering yellow glow of the oil lamps flickering above the tables began to grow repetitive and irritating. It’s still the same damn room no matter how often I look at it! He thought. Bored out of his mind, he walked towards the door sitting in the corner.

    Am I that desperate that I’m playing with a doorknob for fun? Andrew almost pitied himself.

    Twisting the knob, he expected it to not budge. His eyes widened when he met no resistance and the door opened. Heart racing and adrenaline filling his veins, he poked his head through the door to see the dark hallway. 

    He turned his head to the left and saw barren emptiness stretching seemingly forever. Relieved, he swung his head to the right. Just gotta make sure the coast is clear. 

    George standing inches away with a disappointed frown on his face.

    “Damn it Marshtomp!” The Grovyle yelled as he marched toward the room.

    George raised his left foot and forcefully kicked Andrew’s bright orange stomach, causing him to stumble onto the floor of the interrogation room. His new calmly walked through the doorway, staring into Andrew’s eyes as he kicked the door shut behind him. He placed a tray and bucket on the table before voicing his displeasure.

    George barked, waving his arms. “What were you thinking? Do you want to get us both killed?” 

    “My bad,” Andrew murmured, as he stared at the creature looming over him.

    “Look kid, we all make stupid mistakes, just don’t do it again,” he replied bitterly.

    Andrew gulped. “S-Sure, will do.” 

    The Marshtomp pushed himself up from the ground and climbed back onto the bench. George sat across from him, slumping his head on his left claw. Andrew took notice of the items which George had brought him which lay across the table. 

    He pulled the bucket over to him, finding it heavy and filled to its limit. In one swift motion, the Marshtomp picked it up and emptied all of the water into his mouth. George’s head shot up and his mouth fell agape as he witnessed the spectacle.

    “Thanks, I needed that,” Andrew sighed, wiping some excess water off his face.

    George’s eyes darted from side to side, focusing back on Andrew before speaking.

    “You’re welcome kid, but we have a lot to discuss.”

    Andrew pulled over his plate of food and stuffed a strange, large, purple berry into his mouth. A tiny piece slipped out, as he nodded his head in agreement.

    “So, what do you know about criminal trials?” Asked George.

    “I know a lot.”

    “Prove it. Tell me, does the judge or jury decide if you are guilty?”

    “The jury.”

    “No!” snapped George, “Juries were eliminated thirty years ago.”

    Andrew raised his right flipper and opened his mouth, only to be cut off by George.

    “Do you know anything about criminal trials?” He repeated.

    “Maybe?” 

    George sighed and studied Andrew, his eyes yet again pierced at Andrew’s very soul. They soon turned to the food that he was picking at. Andrew stuffed another berry in his mouth as he lazily eyed George. Suddenly, the Grovyle smashed his claws on the table and took a loud, deep breath.

    “Alright. Let’s start from the beginning,” he said, clutching his claws into fists.

    Andrew leaned in closer, popping another berry into his mouth.

    “Years ago, a new Pokemon of this realm rose to the throne-“

    “Wait what?” Andrew questioned as he shook his head. “I’m gonna be sent to prison and you’re giving me a history lesson?”

    “I did say I would start from the beginning,” George interjected as he stuck up a claw.

    “How much time do we have?” Asked Andrew, clearly annoyed.

    “Enough time for me to tell the story,” stated George, again slamming the table with his claws.

    “Look man, I’m not in the mood for a lecture right now,” replied Andrew. He leaned back and attempted to place his short legs on the table, failing to do so as he began squirming them helplessly.

    George snapped, leaping onto the table and pointing down at Andrew. “You know what, Marshtomp? I don’t get to tell this story very often. Just let me do this.”

    “Ugh, fine,” scoffed Andrew, as he rolled his eyes.

    George hopped back onto his bench, “Anyways, as I was saying, a while ago this new king came to power.”

    Weird Pokemon history? Maybe this could be sort of interesting, Andrew thought. “How long ago?” He asked, leaning forward.

    “Maybe two or three hundred years ago?”

    Andrew reached over to his plate and grabbed multiple colorful, large berries. He stuffed them all into his mouth and chewed loudly, savoring each of their foreign, sweet juices.

    George narrowed his eyes. “Do you mind?” 

    Andrew finished chewing his food. His heart began to beat faster as he saw a look of rage begin to conquer George’s face.

    “Sorry, but these prison berries are some of the best things I’ve ever had,” Andrew said sincerely, raising his flippers.

    “Well I hope you enjoyed them,” George snapped back sarcastically. “Now, may I continue?”

    Andrew placed a flipper on the table and leaned in further. “I’m not stopping you.”

    George shook his head and muttered under his breath, before continuing his story. “Okay, so the king fought some wars and even won a few of them. But thousands, maybe even tens of thousands were killed in all the fighting. So now everyone hates him.”

    “Wouldn’t it be, everyone hated him?” asked Andrew, smugly.

    George rolled his eyes, “He’s still alive, and everyone still hates him.”

    “How? Is he a vampire or something?”

    George stared blankly at Andrew. He closed his eyes and sighed, before facepalming. 

    “No kid, he’s a Ninetails, not a vampire.”

    “Oh yeah, that makes more sense,” Andrew murmured.

    Wait a second, why am I putting up with this? Isn’t he supposed to help me stay out of prison? Maybe he does want to kill me… with boredom.

    He put a flipper to his forehead. “What does this have to do with my trial?

    “Well, the king eliminated juries thirty years ago and gave all the legal power to a bunch of judges he appointed, and they all suck. Lucky for you, Mister Marshtomp, you’re not being tried by the public courts!”

    “I’m not?”

    George chuckled. “Nope! You’re being tried by the guild’s court. But don’t worry, their judges suck just as much as the king’s ones.”

    Andrew groaned. “Couldn’t you have just said that?”

    “I could, but where’s the fun in that?”

    Andrew’s flippers then began to curl into as close to fists as he could bend them. Is this guy serious? I could get sent to prison, but this stupid Pokemon’s priority is having fun? His eyes began to narrow and adrenaline began to pump through his veins. He slowly began to raise his flippers.

    “Andrew, calm down,” George began to raise his slick, sharp claws.

    “Calm down? I’m going to die, and you want me to calm down? Am I going to have to spend the rest of my short life listening to your pointless stories?” Andrew yelled, his voice growing in volume, crazed eyes nearly bulging out of his head.

    His heart thrashed against his orange chest as if desperately trying to escape from his body with all its might. Breathing became a conscious task. He began pulling at his head fin with all his strength as he shook uncontrollably.

    “I can’t do this!” Andrew began to repeat loudly.

    “Stop it, kid! You’re gonna hurt yourself,” pleaded George.

    Not like you’d care if I did. Andrew thought. He continued viciously, pulling at his head fin. Tears began to well in his eyes as the pain overwhelmed him. I have to be human again, I need to be human again, let me be human again! He screamed within his mind. The tears began to stream down his face. Out of habit, he raised a flipper to wipe them. Removing it revealed that George was no longer in front of him.

    Suddenly, Andrew’s perspective began to shift, as his body began to move toward the ground without his consent.

    The table connected with his jaw.

    A sharp pain shot through his body, especially in his sensitive, already maimed, head fin. His flippers were grabbed tightly and pinned against his back. George’s claws dug into his newly moistened skin. Did that Grovyle just attack me? He panicked in his mind.

    “Let go of me,” Andrew yelled, vigorously.

    “Not unless you promise to stop hurting yourself, kid.”

    “I said let go,” Andrew repeated loudly. He thrashed aggressively against George’s strong grip, failing to break free.

    “Damn it kid, do you want to get us killed or not? Quiet down,” George said in a hushed but serious tone.

    “Maybe I’ll shut up if you let go,” sneered Andrew.

    “Fine, but if you do anything else that’s stupid I’ll make sure you never see the ocean again,” George whispered as he released Andrew from his grasp.

    Guess I’ll have to be on my best behavior. Andrew mocked himself in his head. 

    His erratic breathing began to normalize, as well as his overactive heart. He raised his head from the wooden table. To his dismay, his flippers and head fin pulsed with so much pain that he could feel his heartbeat through them. George strutted to the bench across from him and took a seat, clasping his claws down on the table.

    “So, now that the fun is over, shall we discuss your case?”

    The one that you’re probably going to try to sabotage? Sure thing Georgie!

    “Not like we have anything better to do,” he scoffed.

    George spoke dryly. “Well, I’m gonna be honest with you kid, you’re probably fucked.” 

    Andrew sarcastically asked, “Aren’t you supposed to assure me that everything is going to be okay and I’m going to get through this?”

    “Don’t worry, dear Mister Marshtomp! We’re gonna get through this together,” George said in a high-pitched voice.

    Is this seriously the last person I am going to talk to before I die? Andrew pondered. God, take me already!

    “Is there no chance of me being found innocent?”

    “Well… Maybe we could try running with the story that the Kecleon offered the food to you for free? I have no idea how we’d prove it, but it’s better than nothing,” George put his claws behind his head and leaned on them.

    Andrew put a flipper to his left gill and pushed down lightly on it. It caused a strange sensation to run through the left side of his head, making it vibrate a little. Finding the feeling unpleasant, he placed his flipper back on the table.

    “Do you think that defense would actually work?”

    “Nope,” George responded nonchalantly, “But again, it’s better than nothing.”

    The noise of the old door creaking filled the room. Andrew and George twisted their heads back. A Pokemon Andrew registered as a Dewott made its presence known, as it stepped into the bright interrogation room. It put its arms to its hips and stuck its chin up towards the ceiling.

    “We’re up George,” he said with sickening confidence.

    George turned back to Andrew, “We definitely had time for another story.”

    I am definitely going to die.

    I hope you enjoyed the latest of Andrew’s mishaps. Even though we are only three chapter in, the lengths have been increasing quite a bit. This chapter was originally supposed to be a part of the next one. Regardless, I hope to be able to maintain the pace at which I am writing. As usual, comments or feedback of any kind is always appreciated. Stay tuned for “Marsh Attorney” in two-ish weeks.

    -YMCA

    3/17/24:

    Look at that! This chapter has been re-edited, to be brought up to my current standard of prose. Hope you enjoyed!

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    1. Mar 9, '24 at 3:31 pm

      Hello. Here with a review for the book club. Will go chapter by chapter and come to some general comments at the end.

      Chapter 1:
      The lack of oxygen moment, I don’t quite understand why would he have a flash of his memories. I know that this goes very in line to make a very good scene, but from a logical sense he wasn’t really drowning, was he?

      Allowing him to shut his eyes and drift peacefully off to sleep.
      Two orange eyes opened on the seafloor.

      I don’t quite understand what happened here or it’s hard to know at first glance. Is it him who is the one opening the eyes at the bottom of the sea? Or it could have been someone else like a random Krabby at the bottom of the ocean? Of course, the next sentence does somewhat clear up what happened, but I think maybe you wanted here to show there is a scene break since there is some amount of time that has passed.

      Wow, he is very quickly resorting to stealing. I like that you are showing the justification of this act and that is “if everyone does it, then why can’t I?”. We may look the other way, but most of the criminals have a justification for their acts which seems like they have a right to do so and it’s nice that you are not ignoring this fact.

      I don’t quite understand Andrew’s wink. So this means that the Kecleon did see him? But then you say that no one caught him in the act. I don’t know if this expression makes sense, but I guess it’s a very minor thing.

      But wow, there is a lot of uniqueness in this story. No partner to lean on, he is just there on his own with no set goal in mind. You bring him to a point where I don’t think any fic has gone which is making him resort to stealing in the first chapter. I like how you are doing it. This definitely will hook up many readers, just because of how much this story stands out so far.

      Chapter 2:

      It took him a minute to
      figure out how [..]

      I think you added a new paragraph accidentally when porting. Just pointing out that this happened.

      I’m surprised how this Zorua is allowed to interrogate in the first place. Constant mockery, disrespecting the interrogated… This is literally the opposite way a normal interrogation would go which is instead building compassion with the interrogated. I guess this is also the most typical way this happens in all types of media since it’s a lot more entertaining, but I like how you still keep the Espeon on the side as the Pokemon who should represent the respectfulness of the interrogation, but he only intervenes when things get harsh. Though, I was surprised by how that table being broken meant so little in the end. Maybe smth more could have been added about that?

      I’m amazed by the really good description of the prison. It was fairly simple and short, but the feeling of it was captured perfectly when there was a transition of how the hallways became gray the further he walked down the hallway. The simplicity of the prison cell was also good, though I’m surprised he was given anything to sleep on (because of what happened during interrogation).

      Chapter 3:
      Oh my god, this is a duplicated page… Heck, this is definitely the fault of the problems that were happening at the release of PMDFF. I have to intervene, I’m fixing this myself. I’m gonna privatise your duplicate chapter just so you don’t for sure lose anything important.

      I quite don’t understand why would Andrew try to leave his place. So far I could tell from his “reasonable” side that he wouldn’t try to do such things. So did his Pokémon side make him do it? Maybe then point out that this is his Pokémon side doing these things? Or is it not and he is driven by just pure curiosity? Would be nice for more details in this regard.

      Maybe this could be sort of interesting. Andrew thought, “How long ago?” he asked,

      I don’t understand these dialogue tags. I think this could be just fixed by different punctuation, but the first and second dialogue tags in this coordination make it seem like they are both assigned to the same dialogue text. This can be fixed in a variety of ways and maybe it’s not that major, but just want to point it out.

      Andrew is self-harmful? Jeez, you are showing a lot of his bad personality. Though, where did it come from? Was he being like this when he was a human? Or is it his Pokemon side leading him to do this? I hope you will answer this later in your story.

      The one which you’re probably going to try to sabotage? Sure thing Georgie! Andrew thought.

      Wow, is this the result of what Zorua did to him last time? I’m curious if this self-depiction came from just that interrogation. It seems like he got really badly affected by it and I like how far you are going with it.

      I am definitely going to die.

      I like this a lot for some reason. Just Andrew being straight with the facts. However, you are showing him being very pessimistic which goes very much inline with his character traits so far. I like how there is a lot of room for character development with all of this.

      George the Grovyle… he is the only character so far who shows any real sympathy towards Andrew (except the Audino of course, but that kinda seemed given). Even when Andrew does smth wrong, he still shows understanding to him. Is it because he is a lawyer to him? Of course, I don’t really know that without reading further, but that kind of suggests it. However, if that is the case, the lawyer was kind of given for free as Andrew could not afford one. Shouldn’t those lawyers then behave like they are forced to do their job for free? Or is it because of some kind of positive character trait that Grovyle has that prevents him from behaving that way (eg. being selfless)? But so far, George is definitely my favourite character just because of how much spotlight he was given and how he behaves in a very empathetic way, especially with him stopping Andrew from self-harm and making a little fun out of him while telling the story about the king.

      General comments:
      I think the characters are very strong in this story and by that, I mean they are heavily determined emotionally. It’s very clear what traits each character has and I like how much they are distinct. I also like how much we have revealed about the characters despite them being described in so few words. As I’ve mentioned before, definitely the best character described like this so far was Grovyle, while Andrew seems like not everything about him was revealed yet.

      The descriptions were good. There were never any big problems with assessing where the characters are nor did it lack detail. You also didn’t go too far with those descriptions so you just did good overall.

      These forewords are interesting. Is the character that is saying this going to be introduced later down the line? I know that they are kind of breaking the 4th wall, but it could set a stage for something very unique. Just throwing ideas.

      In general, a very nice story. Though I would imagine it picks up with more action later, but this is a very solid start and definitely could hook up a reader for a lot longer.

      1. @FrenzyMar 18, '24 at 5:47 pm

        I added the lack of oxygen moment to show how Andrew thought he was going to die, and just add some suspense to the chapter. I agree with your point about opening his eyes at the bottom of the ocean, that is just some weird prose and I’ll iron that out sooner or later. For the winking part, I just meant catch as in literally caught and apprehended by law enforcement.

        I’m happy to see you liked the description of the prison. That’s never something I’ve been complimented on. Thank you.

        Andrew is just generally a bit of a troublemaker, and I don’t think it’s outside the realm of possibility he’d attempt to escape prison especially after robbing the store. However, I could have been more clear about that. Yesterday I rolled out my re-edit of the third chapter, so hopefully that addresses all of the weird dialogue tags and awkward prose of my early writing. Andrew pulling his fin isn’t meant to be serious self harm, just him attempting to cope in a stressful situation. I apologize if it came of as an allegory for serious self harm.

        Regardless, I am glad you enjoyed your time with these first few chapters. You are very much correct in identifying the characters are all very much driven by emotion. And if you want to see where this leads them, I implore you to keep reading. Only gets crazier from here…

        Thanks for the feedback!